Ms. Gokturk

 

Effective Beginnings Begin Today!

 

The beginning of your feature is vital to drawing your reader into your piece. If you make us snooze, you’ll lose. Good journalists win when they capture their readers’ interests and keep it. So, let’s get you thinking about an effective start! There are many ways to begin without killing the life out of your subject and reader – let’s try and break out of the high school essay mode and get creative!.

 

YOUR TASK

Choose three (3) of the methods from below and write the beginning to your piece following the format for each. Please hand in your three intros at the end of the period that demonstrate your reflection of your topic.

 

While there is no formula on the length of an effective intro, remember that your goal is to try and gain our interest. Use vivid and descriptive language, and don’t be afraid to be creative. Stay away from lazy adjectives and verbs.

 

These are potential introductions, and they are not written in stone. Nevertheless, please note that your introduction will set the tone of your piece as well as set the groundwork for what will be covered.

 

YOU MUST CHOOSE TWO OF THE FOLLOWING (but you may choose three)

 

ANECDOTE  

Introducing your feature with a brief narrative drawn from current news events, history, or your personal experience can be an effective way to capture your reader’s interest.

 

            A couple of nights ago, someone offered me a cigarette at a party. I started to say no, but I had to reflect for a minute. Why don’t I smoke?

            I looked around the room and could barely see across the basement, not because it was dark or because of the low ceiling, but because of the clouds of smoke billowing around the masses of teen groups. I saw a really good looking girl light up, and all I could think was, “What a shame” and “How disgusting.” I imagined her lungs filling with smoke, tarring her young, pink lungs. I pictured her 30 years from now, no longer beautiful, but yellow and haggard, coughing up juicy bits as she strolled the supermarket aisles, aching for her next cigarette. I imagined her wheezing into an oxygen mask.

            I looked back at the generous soul dangling his cancer my way. I said, “No thanks, I don’t smoke.”

 

ANALOGY/COMPARISON 

An analogy or comparison can be useful in getting readers to contemplate a topic they might otherwise reject as unfamiliar or uninteresting. By pairing seemingly unrelated concepts, you introduce an idea and illustrate it.

 

The gods, they say, give breath, and they take it away. But the same could be said—could it not?—of the humble comma. Add it to the present clause and, all of the a sudden, the mind is, quite literally, given pause to think; take it out if you wish or forget it and the mind is deprived of a resting place. Yet still the comma gets no respect. It seems just a slip of a thing, a pedant’s tick, a blip on the edge of our consciousness, a kind of printer’s smudge almost. Small, we claim, is beautiful (especially in the age of the microchip), yet what is so often used, and so rarely recalled, as the comma—unless it be breath itself? (Pico Ayer)

 

DIALOGUE   

Opening your feature with brief dialogue can attract a reader’s attention and can succinctly illustrate a particular point of view you want to discuss. It shows rather than tells, and it appeals to our innate curiosity about what others say. Be careful not to sound artificial or contrived.

 

            “This would be excellent, to go in the ocean with this thing,” says Dave Gembrius, fifteen.

            He is looking at a $170 Sea Cruiser raft.

            “Great,” says his companion, Dan Holmes, also fifteen.

            This is Herman’s World of Sporting Goods, and Gembrius and Holmes are two of this nation’s fastest growing sport, ocean kayaking.

 

FACTS/STATISTICS

Begin with brief facts of statistics that support the purpose of your story. These facts or statistics will drive your piece. While shock is an effective attention-grabbing device, don’t lie! Don’t be Fox News either and exaggerate ad nauseum.

 

Charles Darwin and Abraham Lincoln were born on the same day – February 12, 1809. They are also linked in another curious way. Both must simultaneously play, and for similar reasons, the role of man and legend.

 

Twenty thousand teens will die this year from AIDS. Twenty thousand thought it couldn’t happen to them.

 

IRONY/HUMOR

Irony or humor is an effective way to begin. Humor, especially, signals to the reader that your story will be entertaining to read, and irony can indicate an unexpected approach to a topic.

 

In Moulmeim, in lower Burma, I was hated by large numbers of people – the only time in my life that I have been important enough for this to happen to me.

 

            The desk is so untidy, the student thinks. I must do my laundry. Maybe I need to mow the lawn? He goes downstairs and starts talking to his mother, helping her put the groceries away. “Mom, you want to watch Seventh Heaven with me?”

            Sounds like a great person, right? Considerate? Think again. This is the procrastinator extreme. He would rather help around the house than complete his homework!

 

You may only choose one of the following.

 

SHORT GENERALIZATION

            It’s a miracle New York works at all. (E.B. White)

 

STARTLING CLAIM

            It is possible to stop drug addiction in this country in a very short time. (Gore Vidal)

 

RHETORICAL QUESTION

            Just how interconnected is the animal world? If we damage one area, what else might suffer?

 

AVOID IT, BUCKY

  • APOLOGY: I am a student who is not an expert
  • COMPLAINT: I would rather write about something else, but here it goes…
  • DICTIONARY: The dictionary defines the verb snore as follows….
  • PLATITUDE: America is the land of opportunity, and no one knows better than Madonna.
  • REFERENCE TO TITLE: As you can see from the title, this story is about

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