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Introduction, Conclusion, Topic Sentences, Title (20%)

Body, Development, Organization (40%)

Vocabulary, Mechanics (Punctuation, Spelling, Capitalization, Grammar, Typos) 20%

Effort, Improvement, Presentation (20%)

Distinguished (or "WOW!")


Creative introduction and conclusion; purpose of profile is obvious and fulfilled—there is strong, interesting, and vivid glue; compelling introduction and profound conclusion; original topic sentences. The profile feature evokes intense emotions. Compelling Title.

Gives reader dynamic impression and profound understanding of the subject; aptly uses quotes and description to reveal the person; creative transitions; uses similes/metaphors to create rich description; explores inner qualities of subject; narration adeptly weaves essential facts and elements into narrative artfully. Glue is powerful.

Professional. Sophisticated. High level, active words are selected deliberately. There is no more than one mechanical error in the entire story. Sentence structure is varied.

Evidence of substantial time; student is working at highest potential; interviews are thorough and factual. There are no errors in names or content. Student sought help in or out of class from teacher and students. Student chose a challenging topic. Revisions are obvious.

Proficient (or "Pretty Decent") (16-18)

Solid introduction that uses "catchy" intro device; purpose of essay is clear; clear topic sentences. Glue is strong. Profile provides insight about the subject reader. Emotions are strongly evoked. Catchy title.

Gives reader vivid picture and deep understanding of subject; sophisticated transitions; uses similes/metaphors; uses quotes and description to illustrate person; creative presentation of person. Glue is sophisticated.

Most vocabulary is sophisticated and used properly. There are no more than 3 mechanical errors.

Evidence of time. Student is working near highest potential; some improvement; polished presentation. Student sought help in or out of class. Revisions made.

Satisfactory (or "Fair")


Basic needs of introduction and conclusion are met though intent may not be totally clear; glue is weak or vague; clear topic sentences; intro and conclusion meet minimum length requirement; reports facts without insight. Little or no emotions evoked. Basic Title.

Describes person in a basic, predictable and/or awkward way; awkward transitions; too much telling and not enough quoting and description; presentation is “nuts and bolts” and little else. Glue is vague, undefined, or very weak weak.

May use simple words and take few risks. Vocabulary may be somewhat dull and/or repetitive. The profile is legible but may contain multiple errors.

Adequate amount of time is evident; similar errors in previous stories; little or no improvement; neat presentation. Some revisions made.

Unsatisfactory (or "Needs A Lot of Work")


Intro and/or conclusion is either too short, missing, or confusing. The glue is minimal or non-existent. Topic sentences are missing or confusing. Neither the author nor the reader has learned anything significant about the person. Inappropriate or missing title.

Uses sweeping generalizations with no supporting examples; little or no quotes or description; missing or confusing transitions; no attempt to use similes/metaphors; information is unfocused or confusing; paragraphs  too long, too  short, or  not indented. Glue is missing.

Misuses basic vocabulary. Difficult to read because of a number of distracting errors.

Repeated errors; class-time was not used productively; little or no time or care; sloppy; little or no revision evident.

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