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Peer Editing for the Cause Proposal

To the Editor(s): Please write your name in the table. Please consider what kind of feedback you would like to receive and try to offer the same quality of feedback to your classmates.Follow the steps carefully, providing attention to detail to help the writer.Donít limit yourself to this box: feel free to write in the body of the essay!Read the work slowly, putting checks by the more effective parts of it and putting question marks by the parts that are unclear to you.Circle any spelling or capitalization errors, and note any other mechanical problems by underlining or circling.

 

 

Editor Name

 

General Reaction -- Read your classmate's proposal quickly to understand its ideas. Write a few sentences addressing your first impressions about it.Is it well organized? Has it fulfilled the assignment of presenting a proposal for a cause? Other impressions?

 

TOPIC SECTION:

What is the cause? How has the general issue been defined?

What is it about this topic that bothers the author?

What frustrations does the author have about the topic?

 

 

 

MOTIVATION SECTION:

         Why did the author choose this topic?

         Why has the author stated the topic is important?

         What evidence did the author supply?

         Does the motivation sound genuine or just written for a school assignment?

 

 

QUESTIONS SECTION:

Based on the questions the author listed, what is s/he looking for? In other words, where do you think this is going? Is the general area of pursuit clear?

 

 

PROPOSED CAUSE SECTION:

         What does the author expect to accomplish this semester? How?

         What does the author hope to possibly do to make a difference?

 

 

Does the author sound interested in the topic? If you sense that an interest (or passion) is lacking, what might you suggest to the author?

 

How might this topic be addressed here at Schreiber/Port? Indicate where you see this issue at the local level.

 

How can the proposal be clearer?(What could be added?)

 

Which parts are unnecessary?

 

 

Suggestions: Your colleague has decided to take on this topic for the semester. It may seem like the topic is too large, too small, or lacking in conviction. The suggestions you might offer here could be about how to narrow or enlarge the scope or how to help the author tap into whatís relevant for a teen today. Can you envision the author encountering any problems with this topic or approach?

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